REVISION REQUEST Your app is looking great so far! However, there are some changes to be made before full acceptance can be given:
Please rewrite or provide new links for both your first and third person samples. Both did not accurately display your ability to portray Germany's character ICly. Also, the third person sample is more focused on two characters than just Germany than his thoughts, actions, and self.
Please reply with your changes within three days time. Thank you!
[The video turns on and a very stern looking Germany is seen looking directly into the camera. Of course, the stern expression always seems to be on his face...unless he's forcing a smile. Then it just gets scary.]
First. One of you are missing a dog and a child. The child and dog appeared in my front lawn, digging up the garden which I had just finished planting.
[He glances back at the kid, who looks absolutely terrified of the big scary German man. If he is stuck in this place, he is going to have his house look like he wants it to. And he most certainly doesn't need animals and children ruining his work. He turns the camera around so that the kid and dog can be seen, looking fairly dirty.]
If these two belong in your house, send word immediately and I will escort them home.
Secondly, this dog is far too big for a child this size to be trying to walk. A small or medium sized dog would be a much better fit for someone of that height. Otherwise, you end up with this situation where the master has no way to control the dog and the dog ends up in someone's garden.
[He pauses for a moment to take in a breath and sigh it out. Honestly...He wasn't trying to lecture! It just came out that way when he was just trying to be helpful.]
If you are interested, I am willing to teach your dog basic obedience commands. That way, when you want it to do something it will li--OI! Dog! No! The couch is not the place to use the bathroom!
[The video abruptly cuts off.]
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[Third Person]
His muscles burned and ached, but the end was in sight. The blond pushed himself extra hard in the final lap, as he was trying to beat his own personal record. Germany skidded to a halt, pressing the button on the stopwatch he had been carrying in hand during his path around the paved track. He hummed quietly as he looked over the time, nodding in satisfaction. Thirty two seconds faster than last time. While it was his best to date, he was sure that he could do better next time. However, it would have to wait until the next day. There were still things that needed to be done before he could relax too much.
He glanced over at the rising sun. The colors in the sky were quite stunning. Germany had been so focused on his training that he hadn't even noticed until it was nearly too late. He glanced down at the watch on his wrist, noting the time. There wasn't much spare time he had in his schedule, so Germany took one last look at the lovely display before turning on his heels and promptly heading back toward the locker room in the building nearby. Inside, his clean clothes were exactly where he left them. They were folded neatly, as to prevent them from being wrinkled. After all, there wasn't anything worse than a disheveled uniform. He sat himself down on the bench and pulled off his boots with a quiet sight. They were then set off to the side.
The blond's mind wandered back to moments earlier, when he had looked to the sky. It would have been nice to have been able to sit outside and watch the sunrise. If he compromised on that, though, it would throw his entire day off. As he pulled the shirt over his head and began folding it, he had a thought. "If I complete my schedule on time today, I'll stop by the market and buy some wurst and beer." He said to himself. Germany's lips quirked up into a small smirk, which was the most he could manage most days. There wasn't anything better after a hard day of working than a nice cold beer and some wurst.
Now if he could manage to get through the day without wanting to strangle Italy for slacking off or running away, it would be even better. It wasn't likely, but hey. Germany could dream.
REJECTED I'm sorry to inform you that your application cannot be accepted at this time. If you would like details on the decision, please contact the mod account via message and I'll be happy to explain to you the reason for the rejection. You are welcome to reapply for this character during the next cycle with a revised application. Thank you for your time!
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Revision Request
Your app is looking great so far! However, there are some changes to be made before full acceptance can be given:
Please reply with your changes within three days time. Thank you!
Revisions
[The video turns on and a very stern looking Germany is seen looking directly into the camera. Of course, the stern expression always seems to be on his face...unless he's forcing a smile. Then it just gets scary.]
First. One of you are missing a dog and a child. The child and dog appeared in my front lawn, digging up the garden which I had just finished planting.
[He glances back at the kid, who looks absolutely terrified of the big scary German man. If he is stuck in this place, he is going to have his house look like he wants it to. And he most certainly doesn't need animals and children ruining his work. He turns the camera around so that the kid and dog can be seen, looking fairly dirty.]
If these two belong in your house, send word immediately and I will escort them home.
Secondly, this dog is far too big for a child this size to be trying to walk. A small or medium sized dog would be a much better fit for someone of that height. Otherwise, you end up with this situation where the master has no way to control the dog and the dog ends up in someone's garden.
[He pauses for a moment to take in a breath and sigh it out. Honestly...He wasn't trying to lecture! It just came out that way when he was just trying to be helpful.]
If you are interested, I am willing to teach your dog basic obedience commands. That way, when you want it to do something it will li--OI! Dog! No! The couch is not the place to use the bathroom!
[The video abruptly cuts off.]
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[Third Person]
His muscles burned and ached, but the end was in sight. The blond pushed himself extra hard in the final lap, as he was trying to beat his own personal record. Germany skidded to a halt, pressing the button on the stopwatch he had been carrying in hand during his path around the paved track. He hummed quietly as he looked over the time, nodding in satisfaction. Thirty two seconds faster than last time. While it was his best to date, he was sure that he could do better next time. However, it would have to wait until the next day. There were still things that needed to be done before he could relax too much.
He glanced over at the rising sun. The colors in the sky were quite stunning. Germany had been so focused on his training that he hadn't even noticed until it was nearly too late. He glanced down at the watch on his wrist, noting the time. There wasn't much spare time he had in his schedule, so Germany took one last look at the lovely display before turning on his heels and promptly heading back toward the locker room in the building nearby. Inside, his clean clothes were exactly where he left them. They were folded neatly, as to prevent them from being wrinkled. After all, there wasn't anything worse than a disheveled uniform. He sat himself down on the bench and pulled off his boots with a quiet sight. They were then set off to the side.
The blond's mind wandered back to moments earlier, when he had looked to the sky. It would have been nice to have been able to sit outside and watch the sunrise. If he compromised on that, though, it would throw his entire day off. As he pulled the shirt over his head and began folding it, he had a thought. "If I complete my schedule on time today, I'll stop by the market and buy some wurst and beer." He said to himself. Germany's lips quirked up into a small smirk, which was the most he could manage most days. There wasn't anything better after a hard day of working than a nice cold beer and some wurst.
Now if he could manage to get through the day without wanting to strangle Italy for slacking off or running away, it would be even better. It wasn't likely, but hey. Germany could dream.
Rejected
I'm sorry to inform you that your application cannot be accepted at this time. If you would like details on the decision, please contact the mod account via message and I'll be happy to explain to you the reason for the rejection. You are welcome to reapply for this character during the next cycle with a revised application. Thank you for your time!